Broken Relationships poem by Michelle Sherlock
Version 1:
Friendship
Fractured
Torn
Once flying high
Dependable
Anchored even in a storm
Now ripped apart
Shattered
Dropped like a stone
Who can mend
What has now fallen?
Who can forgive and release?
Version 2:
Friendship
Fractured
Torn apart
Once an anchor through the storm
Now torn free from its’ moorings
Drifting on endless seas
Dropping like a stone
When storm billows roll
Is there hope to mend life’s canvas
To stitch our souls back together
Or has absence become fonder than presence?
Is it too late for us?
I wrote two versions of this poem – Do you prefer version 1 or 2 and why? I would love to have some feedback.
© Michelle Sherlock 2014
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They each have some great lines and maybe could be combined into one. They were hard to read as I am dealing with the end of a friendship as I read it. Thank you.
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Hi Gloria – I wrote the poems and then have done my best to mend the relationship with a card, flowers and a visit. I need to follow up again but its’ hard to take the risk but should be worth it.
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I like them both too. Equally; the first because I really like single word lines in poems, and the second for its lyricism.
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Thanks Jem – I like them both in different ways too
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Michelle, I like them both; however, the second one has more hope/desire in it that there will be a mending of the friendship.
Blessings ~ Wendy ❀
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Thanks Wendy – appreciate the feedback
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